TigerLily Erie SeaWolf


   Age : 20 Joined : 30 Nov 2007 Posts : 1802 Location : Michigan Favorite Current Tiger(s) : How do I choose?
| Subject: Contest Entry Fri Apr 11, 2008 8:14 pm | |
| First of all, this has, sadly, nothing to do with the Tigers.
So, I had to write something called a 'relationship essay' for my English class this semester. Got an A on it and then my teacher wanted me to submit it to a local creative writing contest, which was a bit of a shocker.
http://blog.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=blog.view&friendID=55231314&blogID=377156724
I posted it on my blog because I wasn't sure about just posting the whole thing here, as it would be unreadable.
Just looking for some second opinions so tell me what you think. (And don't worry about being brutally honest. I can take it, I swear.) _________________ "Contrary to the wisdom of the bumper sticker, it is not enough these days to simply question authority-- you have to speak with it too."
- Taylor Mali, "Like, You Know"
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swiss_tiger Erie SeaWolf


   Age : 38 Joined : 04 Oct 2007 Posts : 1417 Location : Switzerland Favorite Current Tiger(s) : Zoooomaya, Granderson
| Subject: Re: Contest Entry Mon Apr 14, 2008 11:44 pm | |
| Hey Lily I just read your text twice and i liked it very much!
I might not be the perfect person to review this 'cause english is not my mother language... obviously.
But somehow i really could connect to this and i think it is written brilliantly! Despite the fact that it's a short text, i totally could dive into the atmosphere and the thoughts of your main character.
I definitely think you should submit this to a writing contest! _________________

"I'm on a mission. Mark my words: I'll be back, and I'll be able to do what I've been doing." Joel Zumaya |
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TG Toledo Mud Hen


 Joined : 05 Oct 2007 Posts : 6358 Location : Rockwood :] Favorite Current Tiger(s) : MAGGS AND MATT!!!!
| Subject: Re: Contest Entry Tue Apr 15, 2008 2:34 am | |
| Wow. Thats really good. Awesome job on it. _________________ Baseball, it is said, is only a game. True. And the Grand Canyon is only a hole in Arizona. ~ George F. Will |
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TigerLily Erie SeaWolf


   Age : 20 Joined : 30 Nov 2007 Posts : 1802 Location : Michigan Favorite Current Tiger(s) : How do I choose?
| Subject: Re: Contest Entry Tue Apr 15, 2008 5:26 am | |
| Thanks you two!
With any luck something will come of it. ($100 for first prize) _________________ "Contrary to the wisdom of the bumper sticker, it is not enough these days to simply question authority-- you have to speak with it too."
- Taylor Mali, "Like, You Know" |
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swiss_tiger Erie SeaWolf


   Age : 38 Joined : 04 Oct 2007 Posts : 1417 Location : Switzerland Favorite Current Tiger(s) : Zoooomaya, Granderson
| Subject: Re: Contest Entry Tue Apr 15, 2008 7:35 am | |
| Hey great! I'll keep my fingers crossed for you!  _________________

"I'm on a mission. Mark my words: I'll be back, and I'll be able to do what I've been doing." Joel Zumaya |
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TigerLily Erie SeaWolf


   Age : 20 Joined : 30 Nov 2007 Posts : 1802 Location : Michigan Favorite Current Tiger(s) : How do I choose?
| Subject: Re: Contest Entry Tue Apr 15, 2008 9:15 pm | |
| | swiss_tiger wrote: | Hey great! I'll keep my fingers crossed for you!  |
Thank you!  _________________ "Contrary to the wisdom of the bumper sticker, it is not enough these days to simply question authority-- you have to speak with it too."
- Taylor Mali, "Like, You Know" |
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| Subject: Re: Contest Entry Thu May 29, 2008 7:40 am | |
| awesome essay! nice job  |
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